Confusing, kinda nice, and it made me pause to think about breakfast. You should get some music to play in the background so it doesn't sound so empty. I like the voice acting. Your movement could use some work, but it's a great start.
(Also it feels kinda short for an episode)
Yeah, I've never actually animated before the pilot(which I might upload later), so it's been a huge learning curve, things like timing and keyframes have been a learning process, that's why it was so short (ended up shorter WAY than what I thought). Thank you so much for the criticism and I future episodes will be better, hopefully.
I find it funny that the doll had more detail than the child playing with it.
Since this was made last year I have no clue how much you have improved so I'll just say keep things consistent. I saw what looked to be earth and then the bottom of it exploded. "Oh, Antarctica exploded." I thought to myself as that is where the explosion happened on the drawing of the planet. Nope! It was Alaska. The story was shaky as I didn't understand what was going on. Why did the sister have a weird green potion? Why did the brother want it? The humor was ok and all in all it was an OK animation.
lol yeah i know there was a lot of mistakes on this one and i apprciate the honesty and i hope i improve in the future
"Un noël avec les Firats Cocellis"
Pros:
-You finished the animation.
-You made me half smile at the beginning. Sadly that is all I can give you for this movie.
Cons:
-Not fully translated. Your general audience on New Grounds won't understand French and will need those subtitles to get them through the video.
- I don't judge art styles as everyone draws differently. I do, however, judge animation. You animation wasn't clean or smooth. This took me back to my days using Windows Movie Maker.
-Your story made sense for only a fraction of a second. So when Cocellis was young he used to eat shit. That made me kind half smile, but then he made a snow man and the snow man was evil for some reason or another and chased Cocellis for awhile, but then Facebook showed up and punched the snowman who kills Facebook man with laser eyes. When Cocellis finally gets away he finds himself in a house with a strange women who sings something in French. Since the subtitles stopped before this point we'll never know what she says unless I retake French class. Suddenly she turns out to be evil I think?
Conclusion:
BLAM!
If you finished the subtitles I might have give this a 2 or 1.5.You have a lot to work on.
Thank you for your feedback. So basically, to make a quick resume of the story: Firat Cocelli was a kid that used to have no friends because he had a kind of ''crap fetishes'' so then when he grown up he builds a snowman to feel less alone. The problem is when he puts a hat on top of his head, the snowman became somehow evil and then want to kill Firat Cocelli. Being chased by his own creation, he decided to go to her motherhouse by running/traveling all over the place to escape the snowman. When he arrived to her mother house, he realised there was nobody in there until she appears by no where in front of him. She sings to his son : '' Hey my lover Firat. what are you doing here ? It's Mommyx5 that will always be there for you. Tell me what do you want, I'll do everything for you''. Then her voice change into a evil voice which can actually means it's the snowman where he said ''What do you want son of a b****''.
NOTE:
- The animation named '' A christmas with the Firats Cocellis'' because her mother is actually Firat Cocelli but in different pics. I draw the hair and eyes to make it more feminine.
My intention by posting this it's not to show my skills of making animation but it was more like a test (I should precise it in the title earlier). I know the animation is not fully translated which is a big issue, but I'll take fully attention if I have to make another animation. As for the making of the animation, you're right :P I use Window Movie Maker and Paint to make this, that's why my work is not the most artistic work. Thank you very much for you response
"Sex Advice"
Pros:
-Finished the animation. I've seen a few grump animations that don't even try and it's refreshing to see.
-Funny interpretations with great character motion! I loved the eyes popping out!
-Helpful sex advice from the grumps. Always useful
Cons:
-This might just be your signature animation style. However the lines aren't clean and you can see the lines wobble. Might just be the way you do you so no points off here.
-You kinda dipped your toe into the color with Dan for certain shots and then quickly pulled out. Here's my extremely biased opinion: If your going to color the animation go all the way with it.
Concussion
Giving it 3 stars
Besides the spontaneous color this was a great animation and fun to watch. You made me laugh at a scene that original i had halfheartedly chuckled at. Good job!
Wow, Very thoughtful response!! Like you deduced, the wobbling effect is something I added purposefully! thanks for not docking me there! It's a very fair thing to feel a little cheated to have some really nice colored parts, only to go revert to uncolored images. I'm working my way toward efficiently coloring! I try to make one animation a week, so I tend to rush.
Anyway, I sincerely appreciate the time you took to write all of that, and I promise to improve on everything you mentioned! Thank you again !
"SCARY MAN"
Pros:
Completed animation project!
Nice work with the character expressions and movement! Plus you got the values down well. Very funny and fluid.
Decent voice acting. Sounded close to a movie voice over. However you may need to level it out a bit.
Cons:
A bit short in length. I wanted to see more scary man antics!
Backgrounds were kind of fuzzy. It might be something you do when you animate, however they don't match the clear drawings in front of them.
Conclusion:
I give you a 3
It was funny and well made. I like the voice acting and it did seem kinda phoned in at the end, but that kinda added to its charm. As previously stated the backgrounds and it's shortness kinda stood out so I can't give it the 3.5 it deserves.
You've brought joy among this humble homo and his animation.
Funny. Nice animation. All around good! Hey never tell people what something is. Be confident in your art and if you aren't keep trying to make it a table. If someone tells you that they don't know what that strange brown thing hovering above the dollar is then learn from it. It's okay to make mistakes as long as you learn from them.
:) thanks
Happy birthday.
I would like to say though your animation quality is kinda blurry and the lights don't help. If it was in higher resolution or was more clear I would have rated a 3.5.
(Just a question do you use Swivel?)
Thank you, you're too nice the quality isn't blurry, it's complete garbage !
When I watched the preview I thought it was somehow still rendering. Apparently it wasn't...
I don't use Swivel
Cancer on the glamour.
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Jerry and Lucky in a saturday morning 
A christmas with the Firats Cocellis (Translate) *ORIGINAL : Un noël avec les Firats Cocellis 
Sex Advice 
SCARY MAN 
A Dollar 
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